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Postby Fangfallen » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:45 pm

Here is the original, unchecked version of the rulebook:
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Your continued use of the Web site(s) constitutes your agreement to all such terms, conditions and notices, and any changes to the Terms and Conditions made by us here. The term 'votexwars.com' or 'votexwars.com/forum' or 'us' or 'we' refers to the owner(s) of the website. The term 'you' refers to the user or viewer of our website. The use of this website is subject to the following terms of use:

Use the website at your own risk. This website is provided to you "as is," without warranty of any kind either express or implied. Neither vortexwars.com nor its employees, agents, third-party information providers, merchants, licensors or the like warrant that the Web site or its operation will be accurate, reliable, uninterrupted or error-free. No agent or representative has the authority to create any warranty regarding the Web site on behalf of wortexwars.com. Vortexwars.com reserves the right to change or discontinue at any time any aspect or feature of the Web site.

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The content of the pages of this website is for your general information and use only. It is subject to change without notice. Neither we nor any third parties provide any warranty or guarantee as to the accuracy, timeliness, performance, completeness or suitability of the information and materials found or offered on this website for any particular purpose. You acknowledge that such information and materials may contain inaccuracies or errors and we expressly exclude liability for any such inaccuracies or errors to the fullest extent permitted by law. Vortexwars.com is not responsible for any user content or conduct. Users of websites provided by us, are responsible for their own conduct, posts, and content.

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From time to time this website may also include links to other websites. These links are provided for your convenience to provide further information. They do not signify that we endorse the website(s). We have no responsibility for the content in this website posted by our users, or of the linked website(s).

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Vortex Wars Rules
Contents:
1. Introduction
2. Vortex Wars Accounts
3. Language and Behavior
4. Staff

1. Introduction:
It is common knowledge and logic that there are rules to follow on a website/game such as Vortex Wars. Here is our general game and forum rules that are to be complied to by all members. Non-compliance to the ruled below, or terms above, may result in a warning issued to you, a temporarily ban/suspension of your account(s), and/or a permanent ban/suspension of your accounts(s). The rules apply to both the game (vortexwars.com), and the forum (vortexwars.com/forum).

First Offense - A first offense refers to the first strike/warning on your account. The term "warning" on the Vortex Wars Ban Chart is a reference to your first strike/warning only. Generally a warning will be issued to you first, on your first offense, before a ban/suspension occurs, although this is at the moderators/administrators discretion which will vary depending on the perceived severity.
Verbal Warning - This is statement by a moderator, telling you to cease the activity that he or she finds inappropriate, and against the rules.
Official Warning - This is a tool for moderators to log a warning down officially, and will be held on record with your name.
Kick - This is a tool for moderators to remove you from a game, or from chat, should you continue breaking the rules after the official warning.
Ban - Self explanatory. This allows a mod to stop access to your account for a set period of days, as per the rule book.
Permanent Ban - This removes access to your account, unless an appeal is successful against the ban.
IP match - This is a tool that allows moderators to see if a single IP address is being used for multiple accounts. This will only flag up an issue when it is in an in-game situation, but can not be used as sole evidence that accounts are being controlled by a single person.

2. Vortex Wars Accounts:
Members are only permitted to log in with ONE single Vortex Wars account at a time.
Accounts containing or posting any foul language, anything deemed racist, discriminating, harmful, threatening, or inappropriate in nature will be permanently banned.
Accounts are held under the responsibility of the individual creator of the account. If an account is banned, reversals will not take place unless the ban was done unnecessarily, if decided upon by the owner of the site and game.

3. Language & Behavior:
Swearing/Profanity should be kept limited. Please respect other people who also use the website.
Pornographic images is not permitted.
Using racist remarks, slurs, and displaying discriminating, harmful, or threatening behavior (including blackmailing or bribery) toward members and staff is cyber bullying. Your accounts on Vortex Wars and associated forum may be immediately terminated.
Bribing and blackmail is not permitted.
Hacking, or even threatening to hack, is not permitted.
Spamming and advertising is not permitted. Triple posting or higher is considered spamming.
Harassing/Trolling users is not permitted.
Messages in *ALL CAPS* are not permitted.
Sexism/Sexual harassment is not permitted.
Impersonating is not permitted.
Baiting individuals into arguments on a sensitive subject (religion, politics, and moral issues) may be considered harassment.
Abusive Language is not permitted.
Baiting and/or inciting other people into breaking the rules is considered ill mannered at best, and is not permitted.
Cheating in any form is not permitted. This includes, but is not limited to, multi-logging, secret allies, gaming the point system, hacking, or any other methods of cheating that may arise which taint the ethical play of the game.

Not all offenses are listed here. Offenses will include anything that taints the ethical game-play and conduct on associated sites. A first offense may result in a warning, or a ban, depending on the severity. Any secondary offense(s) will result in an immediate and possibly permanent ban/suspension. For accusations of members and staff, proof is advised and may be required for any action(s) to be placed. Discretion of moderators/administrators will be used to determine the accused's penalty, if any is warranted. Screen-shotting use ''ALT+Printscreen'', paste in paint and upload to http://www.imageshack.us is always a good way to do it. Fake screenshots edited by Photoshop, Gimp or any other product are easy to figure out. Posting fake screenshots about someone will leave you sanctioned. Member accusations may be made here.

4. Staff:
Abuse and Corruption will not happen on Vortex Wars. As staff can be hired, you can also be fired, if you do not abide to the rules. Moderators are required to be professional, and give a good outcome to the site and game. They are monitored, and if they are seen to be acting in a manner that goes against the rule book, mod etiquette, or game ethics, an inquiry will begin.






Here is the version I wrote. I believe I have improved readability, grammatical structure, and fixed most if not all spelling mistakes.

I must give credit where credit is due! Ratburntro44 & Joriom have given me much insight and are helping to streamline and correct the rulebook. I couldn't do it without you guys.


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Vortex Wars Terms and Conditions
This web site, (Vortexwars.com/forum/), including all information, software, products, and services available from this website or offered as part of or in conjunction with the website, (Vortexwars.com), to you, the user, is conditioned upon your acceptance of all of the terms, conditions, policies and notices stated here by use of the site(s). We reserve the right to make changes to these Terms and Conditions immediately by posting the changed Terms and Conditions in this location.

Your continued use of the web site(s) constitutes your agreement to all such terms, conditions and notices, and any changes to the Terms and Conditions made by us here. The term 'vortexwars.com' or 'vortexwars.com/forum/' or 'us' or 'we' refers to the owner(s) of the website. The term 'you' refers to the user or viewer of our website. The use of this website is subject to the following terms of use:

Use the website at your own risk. This website is provided to you "as is," without warranty of any kind either express or implied. Neither vortexwars.com nor its employees, agents, third-party information providers, merchants, licensors or the like, warrant that the website or its operation will be accurate, reliable, uninterrupted or error-free. No agent or representative has the authority to create any warranty regarding the website on behalf of vortexwars.com. Vortexwars.com reserves the right to change or discontinue at any time any aspect or feature of the Web site.

Exclusion of Liability
The content of the pages of this website is for your general information and use only. It is subject to change without notice. Neither we nor any third parties provide any warranty or guaranty as to the accuracy, timeliness, performance, completeness or suitability of the information and materials found or offered on this web site for any particular role. You recognize that such information and materials may contain inaccuracies or errors and we expressly exclude liability for any such inaccuracies or errors to the broadest extent allowed by law. Vortexwars.com is not responsible for any user content or conduct. Users of websites provided by us, are responsible for their own conduct, posts, and content.

Indemnification
Your use of any information or materials on this website is entirely at your own risk, for which we shall not be liable. It shall be your own responsibility to ensure that any products, services or information available through this website meet your specific requirements. This web site contains material which is owned by or licensed to us. This material includes, but is not restricted to, the design, layout, look, appearance and graphics. Reproduction is prohibited other than in accordance with the copyright notice, which forms part of these terms and conditions.

Unauthorized use of this website which causes damage to said website, products, or services, may give rise to a claim for damages and/or be a criminal offense.

From time to time this website may also include links to other websites. These links are provided for your convenience to provide further information. They do not signify that we endorse the website(s). We have no responsibility for the content in this website posted by our users, or of the linked website(s).

Copyright
Except for material in the public domain under copyright law, all material contained on the Web site (including all software, HTML code, Java applets, Active X controls and other code) is protected by United States and foreign copyright laws. Except as otherwise expressly provided in these terms and conditions, you may not copy, distribute, transmit, display, perform, reproduce, publish, license, modify, rewrite, create derivative works from, transfer, or sell any material contained on the Web site without the prior consent of the copyright owner.

None of the material contained on the website(s) may be reverse-engineered, disassembled, decompiled, transcribed, stored in a retrieval system, translated into any language or computer language, retransmitted in any form or by any means (electronic, mechanical, photo reproduction, recordation or otherwise), resold or redistributed without the prior written consent of owner. Violation of this provision may result in severe civil and criminal penalties.
_______________________________________________
Vortex Wars Rules
Contents:

A. Introduction
B. Vortex Wars Accounts
C. Language and Behavior
D. Staff

Section A. Introduction:
It is common knowledge and logic that there are rules and regulations to follow on a website/game such as Vortex Wars. Here are our general game and forum rules that are to be complied to by all members. Non-compliance to the rules below, or terms above, may result in a warning issued to you, a temporarily ban/suspension of your account(s), and/or a permanent ban/suspension of your accounts(s). The rules apply to both the game (vortexwars.com), and the forum (vortexwars.com/forum).

  • First Offense - A first offense refers to the first strike/warning on your account. The term "warning" on the Vortex Wars Ban Chart is a reference to your first strike/warning only. Generally a warning will be issued to you first, on your first offense, before a ban/suspension occurs, although this is at the moderators/administrators discretion which will vary depending on the perceived severity.
  • Verbal Warning - This is stated by a moderator, telling you to cease the activity that he or she finds inappropriate, and against the rules.
  • Official Warning - This is a tool for moderators to log a warning down officially, and will be held on record with your name.
  • Kick - This is a tool for moderators to remove you from a game, or from chat, should you continue breaking the rules after the official warning.
  • Ban - This allows a mod to block access to your account for a set period of days, as per the rule book.
  • Permanent Ban - This removes access to your account, unless an appeal is successful against the ban.
  • IP match - This is a tool that allows moderators to see if a single IP address is being used for multiple accounts. This will only flag up an issue when it is in an in-game situation, but cannot be used as the sole evidence that accounts are being controlled by a single person.

Section B. Vortex Wars Accounts:
  • 1.) Members are only permitted to log in with ONE single Vortex Wars account at a time.
  • 2.) Accounts containing or posting any foul language, anything deemed as racist, discriminating, harmful, menacing, or inappropriate in nature will be permanently banished.
  • 3.) Accounts are held under the responsibility of the individual creator of the account. If an account is banned, reversals will not take place unless the ban was done unnecessarily, if decided upon by the owner of the site and the game.

Section C. Language & Behavior:
  • 1.) Swearing/Profanity should be kept limited. Please respect other people who also use the website. Swearing at other people falls under harassment and will result in greater punishment.
  • 2.) Pornographic images are not permitted.
  • 3.) Using racist remarks, slurs, and displaying discriminating, harmful, or threatening behavior (including blackmailing or bribery) toward members and staff is cyber bullying. Your accounts on Vortex Wars and associated forum may be immediately terminated.
  • 4.) Bribing and blackmail is not permitted.
  • 5.) Hacking, or even threatening to hack, is not permitted.
  • 6.) Spamming and advertising are not permitted. Triple posting or higher is considered spamming.
  • 7.) Harassing/Trolling users is not permitted.
  • 8.) Messages in *ALL CAPS* are not permitted.
  • 9.) Sexism/Sexual harassment is not permitted.
  • 10.) Impersonation of any member is not permitted.
  • 11.) Baiting individuals into arguments on a sensitive subject such as religion, politics, and/or moral issues may be considered harassment.
  • 12.) Abusive Language is not permitted.
  • 13.) Baiting and/or inciting other people into breaking the rules is considered ill mannered at best, and is not permitted.
  • 14.) Cheating in any form is not permitted. This includes, but is not limited to, multi-logging, secret allies, gaming the point system, hacking, or whatever other methods of cheating that may arise which taint the ethical play of the game.
  • 15.) Poll names and topic names on the forum which are deemed offensive may result in banishment.


Not all offenses are listed here. Offenses will include anything that taints the ethical game-play and conduct on associated sites. A first offense may result in a warning, or a ban, depending on the severity. Any secondary offense(s) will result in an immediate and possibly permanent ban/suspension. For accusations of members and staff, proof is advised and may be required for any action(s) to be placed. Discretion of the moderators / administrators will be used to determine the accused's penalty, if any, is warranted. Submitting a screenshot is a good way to prove your accusation. Fake screenshots edited by Photoshop, Gimp or any other product are easy to figure out. Posting fake screenshots about someone will leave you sanctioned. Screen-shotting use ''ALT+Printscreen'', paste in paint and upload to http://www.imageshack.us is always a good way to do it. Fake screenshots edited by Photoshop, Gimp or any other product are easy to figure out. Posting fake screenshots about someone will leave you sanctioned. Member accusations may be made here: Report Users.

Section D. Staff:
Abuse and corruption will not happen on VortexWars. As staff can be hired, they can also be fired, if they do not abide by the rules. Moderators are required to be professional, and give a good outcome to the site and the game. They are monitored, and if they are seen to be acting in a manner that goes against the rule book, mod etiquette, or game ethics, an inquiry will begin.
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For additional information you may want to review our FAQ.

Thank you everyone for your cooperation; enjoy Vortex Wars!
Last edited by Fangfallen on Mon Jun 09, 2014 4:00 pm, edited 9 times in total.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby GivinUDaHimelik » Sat Jun 07, 2014 11:49 pm

I coulda been a jokester and said "No" but figured against it.
Meet me (GivinUDaHimelik, Himelik, OneNOnlyHimelik, NoSoliciting) in-game to ask about joining my clan the Killer Mantids. We're always looking for skilled, active players.

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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby BeatlesFan » Sun Jun 08, 2014 12:22 am

Put it in the form of a User Agreement and state that the user must send Lopdo $100 a month for life which cannot be cancelled by any court.
Require new and existing users to agree to it in order to enter either the forum or the game.
No one ever reads through User Agreements and Lopdo will get rich.
Add yourself in for another $50 a month and me for $25 for giving you the idea.

We can retire in about 3 months. Let the lawyers handle the rest.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Ratburntro44 » Sun Jun 08, 2014 12:25 am

The spelling and mechanics fixes are good, though a couple of them are wrong, inconsistent, trivial, or missed. Most of the rewordings are not improvements, particularly in cases such as changing "criminal offense" to "felonious offense". Changing "deemed racist" to "viewed racist" could change the meaning of the whole rule; rather than a moderator being able to decide whether something is racist, the rule would arguably mean that the person reporting it gets to choose this. Are you sure that this is necessarily the case? The reformatting is somewhat unnecessary; labeling all individual rules is helpful, but having empty lines in between them only wastes space. The recommendation of using lightshot for screenshots is annoying, and at most should be put there in addition to the previous instructions.

Other specifics:
Both say "wortexwars.com" in them. Check again for any other typos just in case.
There are a few unnecessary commas and missing commas left here, try reading through another time to find them.
I believe that "warranty" is correct. I am not able to tell whether "guarantee" or "guaranty" is better in this situation.
Either say "website" or "web site" throughout. Either is correct, but you should be consistent.
Saying "accordance" rather than "conformity" under copyright would be better.
"Unauthorized use of this website which causes damage to said website…" is clearer than "Unauthorized use of this website which has damage to said website…".
Saying "rules and regulations" is really not necessary.
"This is a statement by a moderator" would be better at verbal warning than either of these.
"Abuse and Corruption will not happen on Vortex Wars." makes more sense than "Abuse and corruption will not happen to VortexWars."

I believe that should be everything I have to say.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Fangfallen » Sun Jun 08, 2014 12:51 am

BeatlesFan wrote:Put it in the form of a User Agreement and state that the user must send Lopdo $100 a month for life which cannot be cancelled by any court.
Require new and existing users to agree to it in order to enter either the forum or the game.
No one ever reads through User Agreements and Lopdo will get rich.
Add yourself in for another $50 a month and me for $25 for giving you the idea.

We can retire in about 3 months. Let the lawyers handle the rest.


:lol: :lol: :lol:

Brilliant.

Ratburntro44 wrote:The spelling and mechanics fixes are good, though a couple of them are wrong, inconsistent, trivial, or missed. Most of the rewordings are not improvements, particularly in cases such as changing "criminal offense" to "felonious offense".

I changed it to felonious, as I found that to be more... serious? Though the actual level of the offense wouldn't change.

Ratburntro44 wrote:Changing "deemed racist" to "viewed racist" could change the meaning of the whole rule; rather than a moderator being able to decide whether something is racist, the rule would arguably mean that the person reporting it gets to choose this. Are you sure that this is necessarily the case?
I did not think of that, thank you. I'll address that immediately.

Ratburntro44 wrote:The reformatting is somewhat unnecessary; labeling all individual rules is helpful, but having empty lines in between them only wastes space. The recommendation of using lightshot for screenshots is annoying, and at most should be put there in addition to the previous instructions.

I felt the reformatting would improve readability. As for labeling all the rules, that makes it easier for me to tell people what they did wrong. Sorry about the Lightshot recommendation, but I sincerely believe it is the BEST thing to use for screenshots at this time. However, I'll add in the original text as well.

Ratburntro44 wrote:Other specifics:
Both say "wortexwars.com" in them. Check again for any other typos just in case.
There are a few unnecessary commas and missing commas left here, try reading through another time to find them.
I believe that "warranty" is correct. I am not able to tell whether "guarantee" or "guaranty" is better in this situation.
Either say "website" or "web site" throughout. Either is correct, but you should be consistent.
Saying "accordance" rather than "conformity" under copyright would be better.
"Unauthorized use of this website which causes damage to said website…" is clearer than "Unauthorized use of this website which has damage to said website…".
Saying "rules and regulations" is really not necessary.
"This is a statement by a moderator" would be better at verbal warning than either of these.
"Abuse and Corruption will not happen on Vortex Wars." makes more sense than "Abuse and corruption will not happen to VortexWars."

I believe that should be everything I have to say.


I'll take another run through. Thanks for the RatCheck, lemme if any other RatTraps are triggered. :D
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Ratburntro44 » Sun Jun 08, 2014 12:56 am

Oops, a bit of my comment got jumbled up. It should have read
Most of the rewordings are not improvements, particularly in cases such as changing "criminal offense" to "felonious offense". Are you sure that this is necessarily the case?

rather than having "Are you sure that this is necessarily the case?" later on. The impression I was under is that "felonious" would refer to a specific type of crime which may not be what the actual crime would be.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Fangfallen » Sun Jun 08, 2014 1:24 am

Updated.

I edited the rule on swearing/profanity to reflect Lopdo and the modsquad's feelings on it. Basically, swearing in general isn't a big deal, just mute them. The problem arises when they are swearing at or calling people profane words.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Drone6o3 » Sun Jun 08, 2014 1:28 am

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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Ratburntro44 » Sun Jun 08, 2014 1:47 am

Missing a bullet point on verbal warning.
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Re: Vortex Wars Rulebook put through FangCheck

Postby Fangfallen » Sun Jun 08, 2014 1:55 am

Ratburntro44 wrote:Missing a bullet point on verbal warning.


Thank you, I fixed it.
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